Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday: Old Wounds #2

 

It’s time for another SFF Saturday Snippet! What’s SFF Saturday? It’s a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

For the next couple of weeks, I’ll be giving you snippets from a short story I wrote called Old Wounds. This is the second part. You can find the first part here.

When we left Master Sorne, she’d just been interrupted by her apprentice, and there’s too much fear in his voice.

Oh damn. She pulled off her jeweler’s loop and picked up her sword. “Yes?”  She used her best ill-tempered voice.

“There’s a gentleman here to see you.”

Only one? She slipped her sword free from its scabbard. “Send him away. I’m busy.”

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On the writing front

I recently received (and sent back) edits for my short story Missing Persons. So, hopefully, Trust and Treachery, the anthology it’s in, will be coming out soon!

I’m proud of the story as it has a rather long history. I drafted the piece in 1993 and rewrote it in 2010, so it’s been with me quite some time. I’ll be glad to finally get it out into the public.

However, editing it reminded me that once upon a time I was able write a short story that was under 5,000 words. Lately, I can’t seem to write under 8,000!

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

It’s time for another SFF Saturday Snippet! What’s SFF Saturday? It’s a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

I’m taking a bit of a break from Herald as I think I reached a good end to a chapter. I’m not sure where I’m going next in that book, so I need to let it sit. I’ve put all the previous Herald snippets together here, if you’re interested in reading them all at once.

For the next couple of weeks, I’ll be giving you snippets from a short story I wrote called Old Wounds.

This is the start:

Sorne heard her apprentice’s footsteps creaking the floorboards as he crossed the shop toward her closed door. His pace was halting, as if he weren’t sure he should be intruding. She set down her pliers and rod, least she mar the delicate gold of the coronet before her. Dilan was better than this. Her instructions had been very clear—no interruptions. She had a commission to finish by tomorrow and she was never late. She’d no plans to ruin that part of her reputation now, even if it meant a sleepless night.

Dilan rapped on her door. “Master Sorne?” His voice carried far too much fear in it.

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

It’s time for another SFF Saturday Snippet! What’s SFF Saturday? It’s a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

My snippet is another few lines from a work in progress called Herald (at the moment). Eventually, the project be a fantasy loosely based on the Hundred Years War, but it’s in the very early draft stages (as in, you’re pretty much getting the words as I type em).

I’ve put all the previous snippets together here, if you need to catch up.

When we last saw Denis and the enemy King of Angth, night had fallen on the battlefield. Denis’s job is done.

Strong arms lifted him to standing and the Red King’s voice rang in his ear. “Time to return to your people, Denis. Mitchell will see you back. Eat and rest and see to your ablutions, for I will be calling on the Soleil d’Or, ere the night ends.”

“Sire.” Denis’s reply was a brittle thing that broke and shattered in the night air.

The King left him with Mitchell, who helped him back across the a battlefield hushed with the low cries of the dead. Before they reached the Revenan camp, he pulled Mitchell to a stop. “I can walk the rest of the way unaided.”

He’d be damned if he’d let the Prince think him weak.

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Why I don’t fear edits

I missed the signup for Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday, so that will return next week.

In the meantime, I’ve been thinking about edits. I love working on edits, both the self-editing I do and implementing the edits I receive professionally. I’m almost maniacally happy to start in on editing my manuscripts and I have no fear of edits. Why? Well…

Back when I was learning to drive *mumble* years ago, I took driver’s ed. When it came to actually driving, the first time I was behind a wheel of a car, the instructor took me around the neighborhood and then some local roads, so I could get the hang of moving the car, turning, stopping, starting… all the normal stuff.

The second time I was behind the wheel of a car, the instructor took me into center city Philadelphia and had me drive around City Hall. If you’ve never been to Philly, it’s basically a giant circle around a city block that is five lanes or so wide and you have to be in just the right lanes to either turn or keep going. Philly divers are not exactly known for being kind and patient, either.

But he figured if I could manage that, I’d learn that I could dive anywhere.

And it worked. I’ve never, since then, been that horribly frightened of driving anywhere in any kind of traffic. Heck, I even drove a manual transmission car  in Scotland. On single track roads. Best time of my life, really. Not nearly as terrifying as City Hall.

My introduction to having my work professionally edited was kind of like my driver’s education experience. During the second half of my time in the Writing Popular Fiction MFA program at Seton Hill, my mentor sent me this markup on my thesis novel:

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Yeah. It’s a bit like traffic in Philly. Kinda overwhelming.

It’s actually not as bad as it looks. Wwhen I started in on the edits, I discovered that what he’d left me was a detailed map of how to chip away at the crap and polish up what was left. That’s what I did, and it felt great.

So when I received edits from the publisher of the paranormal romance I wrote under my other name, I did not flinch when they looked like this:

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I rolled up my sleeves and got to work. And it was fine. Easy, even. I’d been around City Hall before, and could do it again. It was much like driving in Scotland–maniacally fun.

In both cases, I ended up with a novel that was better and closer to what I wanted than I’d started with. Because that’s what editors do, they help you write a stronger novel. In neither cases was I dictated to, and in a few places, I declined the edits, as I had good, justifiable reasons for writing what I did. In the end, I have to own all the words on the page.

But if you’re worried about edits, don’t be. They can look daunting, but they’re worth navigating.

Don’t fear the edits. They might even be fun!

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

Happy Saturday after Valentine’s day! I’m off to buy inexpensive chocolate! But I leave you with another SFF Saturday Snippet.

What’s SFF Saturday? It’s a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

My snippet is another few lines from a work in progress called Herald (at the moment). Eventually, the project be a fantasy loosely based on the Hundred Years War, but it’s in the very early draft stages (as in, you’re pretty much getting the words as I type em).

I’ve put all the previous snippets together here, if you need to catch up.

When we last saw Denis and the enemy King of Angth, Denis had just fallen over into the mud in exhaustion. He’s surprised to find the King helping him up.

“Now is not the time for heroic lies,” the King said. “Mitchell, help me.”

Between the King and his guard, Denis managed the walk to the next body. And the next and the one after that. But after he set the soul free, an eerie hush fell over the battlefield–Sunset.

Denis shivered as the wailing started, soft at first, then rising, rising until the sound was a din that bore down on the soul. Then it receded until it was only a whisper of agony that underlaid every other noise on the field.

Now the task would shift to the priests, to exorcise the unnamed dead from the land.

It always hurt, this failure. In war, there were simply too many dead.

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

It’s another SFF Saturday! What’s SFF Saturday? It’s a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

My snippet is another few lines from a work in progress called Herald (at the moment). Eventually, the project be a fantasy loosely based on the Hundred Years War, but it’s in the very early draft stages.

I’ve put all the previous snippets together here, if you need to catch up.

When we last saw Denis and the enemy King of Angth, Denis has just found the first name of a fallen Revenan soldier in a letter on the body. He hopes it’s enough to send the dead man’s spirit to rest.

The body shimmered and the soul rose, sluggishly, in the light of the setting sun.

Gods above, thank you. Denis made to rise, but pitched sideways onto the ground instead. The earth smelled of blood and rain and for a moment, he thought it might be better to remain where he was, but others needed him more than he needed rest. Dennis struggled partway out of the mud and was lifted the rest of the way upright.

He turned to thank the King’s guardsman, only to find it was the King that held him steady.

“Can you continue?”

“Yes.” But when the King released him, Denis’s legs wavered. The King’s grip around his arm tightened.

Also, if you’re curious to know more about this project and from whence it came, I posted about it as part of the Next Big Thing blog hop.

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

Happy Groundhog day! Half of my family is from Punxsutawney, PA, so I’m rather fond of the day that puts the little town on the map. Here’s hoping that Phil doesn’t see his shadow, as I am quite done with winter.

Now on to SFF Saturday!

SFF Saturday is a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

My snippet is another few lines from a work in progress called Herald (at the moment). Eventually, the project be a fantasy loosely based on the Hundred Years War, but it’s in the very early draft stages.

I’ve put all the previous snippets together here, if you need to catch up.

When we last saw Denis and the enemy King of Angth, Denis has just encountered a corpse of a fellow countryman, only he doesn’t know the man’s name. The King’s guard manhandles Denis to his feet, but the King tells his guard to let Denis be.

The guard released Denis and he sank back down to the sodden earth, his joints creaking like a bag of bones and his heart lodged at the back of his throat. The sky had taken on the colors of fire. Not much time left until nightfall and so many names he did not know.

Another touch, this one softer and on the crown of his head. “Search the body, Denis,” the king said. “Perhaps there’s a trinket or something that might help name him.”

The dead man was cold and stiff, but his pocket yielded a folded piece of paper–a letter from a sweetheart–and a single name. Gervais. Denis prayed it would be enough to name his soul.

“Gervais of Revena, be remembered.”

Also, if you’re curious to know more about this project and from whence it came, I posted about it as part of the Next Big Thing blog hop.

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Tag, I’m it! The Next Big Thing

Way back in October, the lovely and talented Nikki Hopeman tagged me to answer 10 questions about my work in progress. I… um… sat on those questions for a while. *hangs head in shame*

Meanwhile, my alter-ego got tagged with 10 questions about a work in progress as part of The Next Big Thing blog hop. And I recognized those questions!

So while I was writing up the answers for my pen name’s WIP, I wrote up The Next Big Thing for me. So here it is:

 What is the working title of your book?

As you can see from the various snippets that litter this blog, the working title of the novel is Herald. This will change, I’m sure.

Where did the idea come from for the book?

Fanfic.

No, really. While procrastinating on rewriting the opening to another novel, I ended up writing a 6,000-word fanfic based on the 1989 movie version of Shakespeare’s Henry V. After I wrote that, I started in on another…that had me changing history left, right, and center. It occurred to me that if I stopped, sat back, world-built the Hundred Years war period differently, and added some magic, and set it on another planet, I could have an original piece of fantasy fiction. Because playing with my own characters has always been more fun. And hey! I can change history if I’m making it up.

So I did. There’s an aging and infirmed king, a princess who plots against her brother, the prince and heir. A duke who sees a path to the throne. A young foreign king whose own country still reverberates from the civil war his father and he fought, who seeks to reclaim lands given to his line previously, but also wants what is best for all his people (or the people he thinks are his…), and a royal herald stuck in the middle while two kingdoms fight, his king slowly deteriorates, and his kings heirs plot against each other.

Plus magical names, blood magic, and telepathic links to books.

What genre does your book fall under?

Epic fantasy, most likely.

Which actors would you choose to play your characters in a movie rendition?

vlcsnap-2013-01-29-21h20m49s26*Cough* I still picture Kenneth Branagh as my Henry stand-in (That would be the Red King from the snippets) and vlcsnap-2011-05-28-14h13m17s195Christopher Ravenscroft as my Montjoy stand in (Denis de Mont from the snippets. And yes, the name is an homage to the French battle cry, Montjoie! Saint Denis! as well as the character of Montjoy.) Not as the gentlemen are now, but how they were at the time of the Henry V movie.

What is the one-sentence synopsis of your book?

Revenan royal herald Denis de Mont is caught between his loyalty to King and country and the charisma of the invading Angth king who will either destroy all that Denis loves…or save it, at the price of freedom.

Will your book be self-published or represented by an agency?

With this one, I’ll fight hard to get an agent for it. But that’s a ways off.

How long did it take you to write the first draft of your manuscript?

I’ll let you know when I finish it. I’d like to get most of it written this year, but it’s an expansive project and there are other books I’m also writing, so I suspect this will be a 1-2 year project.

What other books would you compare this story to within your genre?

 I’m aiming at a kind of Guy Gavriel Kay feel, though really, I can’t escape my own style, so I’m bound to miss. If I can tap into a quarter of what makes Kay’s writing so awesome, I’ll be the happiest gal on the planet.

Who or what inspired you to write this book?

Too many rewatches of the KB Henry V movie. That and watching the woman fighters in the SCA.

What else about your book might pique the reader’s interest?

The Catherine-analogous character will be more along the lines of Joan of Arc, I think. That is, she’s going to have brass balls and know how to use them. And a sword.

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Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday

 

SFF Saturday is a group of authors who post snippets of SFF prose and poetry for comment. You can check out other SFF Saturday posts, too.

My snippet is another few lines from a work in progress called Herald (at the moment). Eventually, the project be a fantasy loosely based on the Hundred Years War, but it’s in the very early draft stages.

I’ve put all the previous snippets together here, if you need to catch up.

When we last saw Denis and the enemy King of Angth, Denis had just encountered a corpse of a fellow countryman, only he doesn’t know the man’s name.

This time, Denis had to place both of his hands on the ground to steady his shaking body. “I don’t know him,” he whispered to the earth.

“Then we move on,” the king said.

Denis shook his head, just enough to indicate his defiance. Rough hands gripped Denis’s arm and yanked him upward.

“On your feet.” A gruff voice, unlike the King’s. One of his guards, then.

“Soft, William. Let him be.”

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