Monthly Archives: June 2012

First vs. Deep Third

I’ve spent part of this weekend creating slides for a workshop I’m giving on Deep Point of view at the annual In Your Write Mind Workshop (which is sponsored and run by the Alumni of the Writing Popular Fiction graduate program at Seton Hill).

I have seen folks mention that they don’t like deep limited third because they feel that if you’re getting that close to a character, why not write in first? That first person places the reader just as close to the character as deep limited third. That is, there’s no functional difference between first person and deep limited third person.

They are different. I know they’re different. Having written both, there is a certain feel to close limited third that is different than first… and it’s not just because of the pronouns. There’s still distance in first person, though it’s pretty much always the same distance. But I couldn’t articulate why…

And yes, you can have distance in limited third. One of the great aspects of third person is that you can vary the distance between the reader and the character dropping in deep or rising up to give some distance. But there’s less distance between the reader and the character in deep third person than in first person. But again, I couldn’t articulate why.

Then, while combing through my craft books, I ran across this quote from The Power of Point of View by Alicia Rasley about Deep limited third:

This is the most intense and intimate POV level, more intimate, in fact, then first-person narration. Why? Because an effective first-person narrator can and probably will lie. In deep-immersion third person, the reader can assume that what’s reported is the deepest of personal truth, at least as far as the character knows.

And there it is–what I couldn’t articulate. The difference is that a first person narrator can lie to the reader, that is, they can be unreliable.

If there is falsehood in a deep third person POV, it’s not because the character is deliberately misleading the reader, but because the character has deluded him or herself. What you see in deep third is the personal truth of the character. The inner truth. Not the “truth” the character wishes to present to the outside world.

Deep third certainly isn’t just first with a change in pronouns.

Categories: Deep POV

New home on the Web

I’ve finally scrapped my old website and moved to a more dynamic, easier to update WordPress site. Huzzah!

So what’s been going on with me?

Well, I sold my short story “Missing Persons” to the Trust and Treachery anthology. Look for that later this year.

In November of last year, my day job employee informed our entire office that they were closing it and everyone was to be laid off. My last day was Feb 29th of this year. Two days later, I had a verbal job offer from my current day job employer. So I’m still a high-stakes technical writer, just in a slightly different field. As an added bonus, I’m working in the Strip District of Pittsburgh, which sounds risque, but is not. It’s strip, as in strip of land, not the other meaning. But it’s a vibrant, eclectic community with lots of shops and restaurants. A great place to gather story ideas. It’s also a much shorter commute.

Earlier this year, I became an Associate Editor at Entangled Publications for their Indulgence line of category romances.

So, busy couple of months! But everything came out well.

Categories: Uncategorized

Happy Release Day!

Happy Release Day to Robin Covington!

Her Indulgence title, A Night of Southern Comfort was released from Entangled Publishing today.

It’s fabulous. And hot. Check out this cover:

Cover for A Night of Southern Comfort by Robin Covington

I do have to say I’m a bit biased… I’m her editor. But when I was offered this manuscript to edit, I read the first chapter, then reached through the Internet to snag it before someone else did. This lady? She’s going places.

Here’s the blurb:

One night of passion…

Detective Jackson Cantrell never imagined that one night with an irresistible stranger would turn his life upside down. He’s spent years living in the shadows, but Dr. Michaela Roarke awakened a passion inside him he’d buried years ago.

He never expected the woman would turn out to be the governor’s daughter…and his next assignment. The governor blackmails Jackson to secretly watch over Michaela and protect her from a stalker, or kiss his dream job at the FBI good-bye. Swearing to keep things strictly professional, Jackson moves in with Michaela. Too bad his heart can’t keep the same promise.

But when the stalker’s attacks quickly escalate beyond mere photographs to bodily harm, Jackson must race to save Michaela’s life. And he’ll have to figure out how to keep her once she discovers his lie.

Categories: Editing

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